Incorporating Your Own Voice Paragraph Example 1 Text Description

The below is a text description of the first paragraph example under the incorporating your own voice section on the essay writing page.

Let’s look at one of the paragraphs from the chocolate essay to see how the text is an interplay of the internal voice of the writer and the external voices of other authors.

Key:

• The internal voice of the writer is bold text and followed by the number (1) in superscript;
• the indirect external voices of other authors (i.e. paraphrases) is bold text, followed by the number (2) in superscript;
• and the direct external voices of other authors (i.e.  quotations) is bold text, followed by the number (3) in superscript.

Consumption of chocolate is something that many enjoy, and there is evidence⁽¹⁾ (Parker, Parker, & Brotchie, 2006) that⁽¹⁾ high carbohydrate foods such as chocolate do have a ‘feel good’ effect⁽²⁾. Moreover⁽¹⁾, Scholey and Owen (2013) in a systematic review of the literature in the field point to several studies, such as⁽¹⁾ Macht and Dettmer (2006) and⁽¹⁾ Macht and Mueller (2007), which appear to⁽¹⁾ confirm this effect⁽²⁾. Yet, as⁽¹⁾ Parker, Parker and Brotchie (2006, p. 150) note⁽¹⁾, the mood effects of chocolate⁽²⁾ “are as ephemeral as holding a chocolate in one’s mouth”⁽³⁾. In addition, mood is something that is difficult to isolate and quantify, and aside from the study by⁽¹⁾ Macht and Dettmer (2006) there appears to be little research on any longer term mood affecting influences of chocolate⁽¹⁾. Another point is raised by⁽¹⁾ Macht and Dettmer (2006), whose study found that⁽¹⁾ positive responses to chocolate correlated more with anticipation and temporary sensory pleasure, whereas guilt was also a statistically significant factor for many, for whom the ‘feel-good’ effect would be minimalised⁽²⁾. As these authors stress⁽¹⁾, “temporal tracking of [both] positive and negative emotions”⁽³⁾ (p.335) before and after consuming chocolate in future studies could help in further understanding the ‘feel good’ effect and more negative emotions⁽²⁾.

Explanation of each voice in the paragraph

The below table breaks the sentence down and contains explanations for each voice used.